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In Jack Baruth's opinion piece, he reflects on how cars have changed for current youth when compared to his own experiences.
I think this thesis statement is very simple and to the point however it is lacking some "meat." I was always taught that a thesis statement should be one sentence, one statement, that sets the tone for your whole piece of writing. What this thesis fails to do is lay a "roadmap" for what the entire reset of the analysis will be.
In an opinion piece written for Road & Track, Jack Baruth nostalgically reminisces about his first new car and reflects on how things have changed for youth nowadays.
On the other hand, this thesis is stronger, it includes more of the rhetorical situation with the mention of the publication in Road and Track . This thesis also better defines the rhetorical strategies in the article where it move from anecdote to reflection to opinion. Finally, it is more eloquently written than the first statement.
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I commented on Victoria's and Swati's thesis statement posts. Both of them seemed to use a different approach to writing a thesis than I did. I firmly believe a thesis should be short, probably one sentence, and give the readers a taste of what I intend to write about. I don't like to go too in depth in the thesis however as I feel like it leaves me with very little to write about later.
Your thesis statements seem a little bit short for a rhetorical analysis essay. Based upon the thesis statements we looked over in class, these are very short. Rhetorical analysis essays often have a thesis that is more than one sentence long and have a bit more information. You have good basic ideas, just flesh them out more!
ReplyDeleteI saw how you believe a thesis statement should be short and I respect that, (I don't like the idea of more than one sentence either) but I would suggest to elaborate more and narrow down to exactly what you will say in your essay. You are providing a base for your argument and mapping out your essay in the thesis. Maybe just add if you thought he was successful or mention something about his rhetorical strategies to more closely follow what the book says. Good luck!
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