Revised Introduction

Otis Blank "Corkscrew" August 16, 2014 via Flickr
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Here is my original draft.

Here is my draft with a new introduction.

My new introduction is a lot better thought out. The thesis is a lot better and I think the hook is a lot better as well. I made sure this time that the thesis covered the pertinent topics necessary for rhetorical analysis as well.